Two people talking in fiction isn't the same thing as two people talking in real life. Dialogue in fiction sounds like normal speech but with the filler distilled out--no "ums" or "ahs," not too many "likes" or "uh huhs" or "how are yas,"precious little repetition. Like description, dialogue always serves a purpose. It reveals character or relationships between characters, provides exposition, punctuates the action, and moves the plot along. Dialogue is natural; it's how people talk. It's true to the point of view of the character who is speaking and doesn't leap outside her head.
Here are some basic things to remember about dialogue:
- Provide a tag the first time character speaks, usually after the first phrase or clause.
- Use mainly "he said/she said" and avoid yelling, screaming, shrieking, and so on. Let the actual talk do the work, not the tag.
- Avoid excessive use of adverbs. If your character says something loudly, you probably have to to back to what she said and make it more emphatic.
- Don't have two characters who are speaking face-to-face call each other by their names, unless the situation warrants it.
- Use the present tense.
- Don't throw in a lot of foreign words or expressions.
- Use profanity only where it makes sense for your character.
- Try to keep conversations between your characters short and sweet.
- Read your dialogue out loud to make sure it sounds natural.
Here are some usage rules for dialogue:
- All dialogue should be set off by quotation marks. Commas, periods, question marks go inside quotation marks. If a speaker talks for more than a paragraph, leave off the final quote marks at the end of the first paragraph but include them at the beginning of the second paragraph and at the conclusion of the speech.
- Start a new paragraph each time you change speakers.
- Try not to run dialogue into paragraphs that contain long descriptions. Brief gestures, especially if they identify the speaker can work well, though.
- During long stretches of dialogue, identify the speaker every 5-6 lines.
- Tag each line of dialogue when three or more people are talking.
- Use single quote marks when one speaker quotes another.
- Use ellipses to indicate an incomplete thought and dashes to indicate and interrupted thought.
Some Target Markets for Your Work:
With thanks to Tamara, Romona, and Scott--
For historical crime fiction, visit Mortalis, an imprint of Random House.
For literary fiction, Amy Einhorn, an imprint of Putnam, is receptive to new writers.
The Tin House Quarterly accepts literary fiction from new writers.
For mystery fiction, go to Poisoned Pen Press or Three Rivers Press.
Reminders:
- Don't forget to bring your completed course evaluations with you to class next week. I'll be collecting them at the beginning of the hour.
- All work (assignment 5 and any remaining long pieces) is due at 10PM on Friday, March 12 in Word 03 format. Send copies of assignment 5 to the people in your group. No late papers will be accepted this week. I'll return your assignments to you on Sunday, as usual, and the manuscripts by class time on Monday.
- This is your last chance to take the writing challenges--each person gets one comment per week--to compete for the top three prizes.
- Don't forget to bring your 5-minute excerpt to read to the class.
This Week's Challenge:
Alfred Hitchcock said a good story is "life with the dull parts taken out." The same is true of good dialogue. The following exchange is stilted and generic. Keeping in mind what we talked about in class, how would you improve it?
"What happened to you, Ed?" George asked.
"Well, George," Ed said. "I was walking down the street, and a man came up to me. I said to him, 'What seems to be the difficulty?' He replied, 'You owe me a hundred dollars.' But I didn't. And then he hit me."
See you next Monday.